How does this poem sound?

Behind all the saggy wrinkles and pale skin

Lies years of tales and wisdom within

The lines on her face mark the emotions she felt

The lines by her mouth show her sorrow and guilt

Her hollow eyes have seen too much

Her gravity is heavy against her crutch

Greying of her hair are the signs of her maturity

Not meaning she's lost her wit and integrity

She sits, relinquishing memories of childhood

Needle in my hand, she's not in the mood

Injection in her fleshy vein provides diabetic relief

Though the look on her face is depression and grief

She lays on her bed, heartbeat gradually slipping from my grasp Her eyes are shutting, these moments are her last

Her malleable hands caress my face

I take it away and set it back in its place

The melancholic face tells me shes not herself

This is the conclusion of her health

I place my hand above her still heart

The sound of silence breaks me apart

Behind all the saggy wrinkles %26amp; pale skin

Lies years of youth resting within

How does this poem sound?

Deanna, for a ninth grader, I should say this is a creditable attempt at poetry.

...As you want constructive criticism, that is what I'm giving :

1. You have 'forced' your lines to end in rhyming words, several of which prove incongruous, besides giving your poem a 'overdone' feel.

2. A good poem should tell its story in a simple, continuous and coherent 'sequence'. You have kept jumping to-and-fro, between descriptions to conclusions to evaluations - which gives a feel of listless words, strung together.

...Try tell the old lady's 'story' in order : First describe where you saw her, then what she seemed in your eyes, next how she reacted to your touch, and how it brought an emotional upsurge within you - and prompted you to record it as a poem, for posterity.

It is just a question of rearranging your lines in proper order, while NOT compromising on grammar to 'force' a rhyme.

Dear, you HAVE the potential to be a good poet - or, if I had felt otherwise, I would not have tried to Answer you : Try harder, correct your output as if it were your worst enemy's (!), and make sure that you do not become ungrammatical for the sake of rhyming..,

You are bound to be a success. And my best wishes go with you.

How does this poem sound?

It's beautiful.

How does this poem sound?

Very good!I like it.

How does this poem sound?

its really good!

How does this poem sound?

This is good.

How does this poem sound?

its really good.

How does this poem sound?

My sweet nineth grader, you have a very good talent. only u dont make one long sentence you could have done this

She lays on her bed, hearbeat gradually

Slipping from my grasp, her eyes are shutting

these moments are her last.

Its very touching and heartbreaking, and it is someone in your home, your mother?

Keep writng, have a book of poems and then sign them, dating them until you can have them published.

How does this poem sound?

hi,

i am impressed with your poem... you have written a lovely poem in simple english and while i was reading it ..i felt the life in the poetry...i could feel the dyign person..there no change to be made give it a nice title like

a fragile gift from god: life or anythign of your choice and get it published in a children's magazine i am sure you will win a prize your poem i stouching

goodluck

How does this poem sound?

It's BEAUTIFUL.

but as in format, on "She lays on her bed, heartbeat gradually slipping from my grasp Her eyes are shutting, these moments are her last"

Seperate it.

She lays on her bed

Hearbeat gradually slipping from my grasp

her eyes shutting

these moments are her last

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

happy birthday, i got the forming grey hairs to prove it,

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

Happy birthday to you. My best friend is 36 today so she shares her day with you.

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

funny you should say that

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

No, but happy birthday!!

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

My birthday was on the 5th and my husbands was on the 4th. Our wedding anniversary was on the 17th.

How about we all just celebrate the whole month!

Have a great birthday!

p.s. I've got the "Natural Highlights" myself!

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

NO but I just had to WISH YOU A HAPPY BIRTHDAY !! You 're still so young!! Have a beer for me!!

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

no, but my son is 16 today....11.18pm 19/8/91....happy birthday!

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

Happy Birthday , mine was on the 10th August , Leos are the best!

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

All the best, H AP PY Birthday to ya, "Box, ya want ta duck an dive" You've jis broken ma' nose ya eejit!! All the best.

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

Happy Happy Happy Birthday Tan Man.

And no, i'm 24 and my birthday is July 4th 1983.

So thank you fellow Americans for celebrating my birthday aswell

lol

: )

Hope you have a lovely day

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

Happy Birthday to you, have a good one!

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

Happy Birthday!!!!

No, my b-day is in may.

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

happy birthday i hope your day was a good one

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

I beat you!!! Im 34 today! Happy birthday, its getting worse and worse with every coming birthday!!!!!

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

鈾櫔鈾櫔Happy birthday to you

鈾櫔鈾櫔Happy birthday to you

鈾櫕鈾櫕Happy birthday to Tan Man

鈾櫕鈾櫕Happy birthday to you

HIP HIP

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

Nice to hear some good news for once. Have a star and a good one.

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

Publish your birthdate on the internet? Or trying to get others to do it? What was your mothers maiden name anyway?

I am 33 today , 19.08.1974 anyone else with the same as mine?

Nope, but if it was my birthday, i'm afraid to tell you that i would not be spening my birthday on yahoo answers!

Go out and PAAARRRTY!

?!?!?!Gothic Make up tips?!?!?!?

My friends and I are having a costumes contest, and some people have asked me to do their makeup and costumes...because I can ake things look real. BUT!

I would like some tips on how to make one girl look like a dead brides maid,

and how to make another look like a zombie cheerleader.

for the dead brides maid obviosly grey and black makeup. hair should probably be dyed grey yes?

with black eyeliner and grey lipstick??

with a tattered ratty looking brides maids dress?

for the zombie cheerleader, a shreaded cheerleader uniform,

bright red lipstick, grey facial makeup,black eyeliner and eyeshadow, with hair dyed black and grey?

please provide me with some tips...cause emo girls can only do so much to make people look dead...but dead and pretty can only go so far.

also please don't suggest the use of permanent makeups or markers.

thanks...also please don't comment on my lifestyle

?!?!?!Gothic Make up tips?!?!?!?

I watch way too many re-runs of a haunting to know this, but I know how to do dead makeup, so I'll try. You need to make them as pale as possible without being white. Pale. Not white. Always remember that. Then you need to exagerate the dark circles under their eyes, down to the top of the cheekbones. Blend, and make it look like they haven't slept in a month. Don't go way dark or anything! Use a pearl on their lips, make them very pale as well. Keep other makeup to a minimum. I wouldn't recommend anything but smudged grey liner and grey mascara. Make the dress tattered yes. That was for the bridesmaid. For the cheerleader, go WHITE facial makeup, so it makes her pale. Red lipstick would look excelent. Once again, black under the eye, maybe get some purple liquid liner and draw swirls from her eyes down her cheeks. Think Panic! at the Disco. Once again, grey eyeshadow or keep it pale, the hair would be cool, make sure to pull it up like a cheerleader. Can I make a nice comment? Emo people can be the most inteligent because they are in touch with themselves.

?!?!?!Gothic Make up tips?!?!?!?

The october 2006 issue of Seventeen has a great article on how to do the corpse bride makeup look. I know it's a while back, but if you could get your hands on it, it would seriously do you some good.

?!?!?!Gothic Make up tips?!?!?!?

yeah you should use liike a gallon of eyeliner, and .....i dunno but eyeliner for sure

?!?!?!Gothic Make up tips?!?!?!?

You don't need to dye their hair. Unless the person has been dead a very long time, hair color change isn't likely. I WOULD make it lank and rather dirty looking, as I'm fairly certain the hair won't look healthy after death. For both, give the skin a grayish-green tinge, and lots of black around the eyes to make them appear sunken. Don't do anything bright, because lack of blood means lack of color. Try to make the facial features all a little more gaunt, too. Sunken cheeks, pinched lips, etc. Also, with both costumes, I think it would be really cool if you could get clothing that looked at least 10 years older.

?!?!?!Gothic Make up tips?!?!?!?

i think grey hair would look good for the bride...it would have to be really dark grey lipstick, or else black

dude, i was an emo cheerleader last year for halloween (not much of a transition for me) and i did greyish blue eyeshadow, huge amounts of eyeliner, and dark red lipstick with a uniform i tore up. it has to be really torn tho, or else altered in a way so u can tell its a zombie cheerleader instead of a slutty one or soemthing..amazing how dumb people couldnt tell the difference lol

i bet u guys will look awesome..good luck :)

?!?!?!Gothic Make up tips?!?!?!?

ok youre good on the brides maid but on the cheerleader not red lipstick id do black.

?!?!?!Gothic Make up tips?!?!?!?

scatter a few leaves in the cheerleader's hair?

and for the bridesmaid get a bouquet of lilies or dead flowers.

you should put dark grey circles under their eyes too..

i know a really good technique for making the lips look a bit like a porcelain doll (for the bridesmaid)

you need red lipstick,a brush to apply it,and some kind of cream blush/facepaint that matches the skin tone.

you put the facepaint/blush on the lips,until they're paler and you can't see the natural colour.then you get the red lipstick and brush it on in the centre of the lips. If you do it right it looks kinda creepy but pretty at the same time.

and randomly (there's not much point with these costumes but i thought i might as well put it in) to do fake wounds:

fake blood,banana/clear lip balm,something to spread it with

slice a bit of banana and put it on the skin.spread it a bit,so it looks kinda like a lump on the skin.then lift one side of the banana slightly (with your spreading implement :p) and place a few drops of fake blood a little bit underneath.the lip balm works a bit better as it is stiffer,the banana goes quite soft.the fake blood might stain as well,just so you know.

hope i helped a bit..

:]

Old man Jones was...?

getting ready to go into town to apply for Social Security.Ma Jones says"You dont have a birth certificate how are you going to prove how old you are?"

"Now dont you worry,Ma"he said and leaves for town.He returns a few hours later and reports that he will be getting his first check in about 3 weeks.

"So how did you prove your age?"asks Ma

"Easy"he smiled"I just unbuttoned my shirt and showed them all the grey hairs on my chest!"

"Well while you were at it"she scolds"why didnt you drop your pants and apply for disability?"

Old man Jones was...?

nice one

Old man Jones was...?

omg how sad!

haha!

i wonder if she should get compensation too!!

Old man Jones was...?

ha ha ha good one.....x

Old man Jones was...?

HOTEL KERALA-FONIA

On the road to Trivandrum

Coconut oil in my hair

Warm smell of avial

Rising up through the air

Up ahead in the distance

I saw a bright pink tube-light

My tummy rumbled, I felt weak and thin

I had to stop for a bite

There he stood in the doorway

Flicked his mundu in style

And I was thinking to myself

I don't like the look of his sinister smile

Then he lit up a petromax

Muttering "No power today"

More Mallus down the corridor

I thought I heard them say

Welcome to the Hotel Kerala-fonia

Such a lousy place,

Such a lousy place (background)

Such a sad disgrace,

Plenty of bugs at the Hotel Kerala-fonia

Any time of year

Any time of year (background)

It's infested here

It's infested here

His finger's stuck up his nostril

He's got a big, thick mustache

He makes an ugly, ugly noise

But that's just his laugh

Buxom girls clad in pavada

Eating banana chips

Some roll their eyes, and

Some roll their hips

I said to the manager

My room's full of mice

He said,

Don't worry, saar, I sending you

meen karri, brandy and ice

And still those voices were crying from far away

Wake you up in the middle of the night

Just to hear them pray

Save us from the Hotel Kerala-fonia

Such a lousy place,

Such a lousy place (background)

Such a sad disgrace

Trying to live at the Hotel Kerala-fonia

It is no surprise

It is no surprise (background)

That it swarms with flies

The blind man was pouring

Stale sambar on rice

And he said

We are all just actors here

In Silk Smitha-disguise

And in the dining chamber

We gathered for the feast

We stab it with our steely knives

But we just can't cut that beef

Last thing I remember

I was writhing on the floor

That cockroach in my appam-stew was the culprit,

I am sure

Relax, said the watchman

This enema will make you well

And his friends laughed as they held me down

God's Own Country? Oh, Hell!

(c) The Yeagles

The lyrics of Hotel California from which the above song was inspired as a parody is below...

What does it mean to have Tarantulas in your dreams?

like a week ago, i had this weird dream that i somehow got 2 bigger than normal tarantulas as pets, they were big like dinner plates, and they had black, grey, and white hairs that were really thick, making them lookin like spikes,from what i can remember, they came in a box full of supplies for them, and (i really dont like spiders or tarantulas, and i cringe when i see one, so yeah for me to have pet tarantulas is not normal.

so back to the dream),

the tarantulas were in the box, and trying to crawl out of it, then my mom goes and pushed the spiders back in the box, not scared at all of them, then im thinking to myself if i should keep them or kill them, then i decide to keep them and then i get ready to leave to buy them a bigger cage,

What does it mean to have Tarantulas in your dreams?

I'm not sure. You should go see a psychiatrist if you want because what you've described seems really interesting, but it could mean you are overcoming your arachnophobic fear or the opposite lol.

What does it mean to have Tarantulas in your dreams?

Have you recently talked about spiders or maybe seen something on TV about them. I sometimes fall asleep with the TV on, and what is going on on the television will sometimes seep into my dreams.

What does it mean to have Tarantulas in your dreams?

One interpretation: In one sense, the tarantula is a typical symbol of selfishness. (Sorry.) Receiving two may indicate an opportunity to treat them equally, fairly. That your mother is not scared of them is a good thing.

The notion of "box" is "proper place," i.e., not to let the selfishness move beyond limits. Your mom may not stand for such behavior in real time.

"Watch Your Dreams," Ann Ree Colton,

"Men Are Like Waffles, Women Are Like Spaghetti," Bill and Pam Farrel. (Men tend to like to place things in neat categories or boxes.)

http://www.dreamhawk.com

http://www.dreamhealer.com

Makeup advice please?

I'm 15 and the usual makeup i wear to school is brown eyeliner, brown mascara and concealor. I'm obsessed with looking natural, because i'm scared i'll be judged as trying to hard, or fake. i pulled out a bunch of eyelashes with a curler cuz one eye has 'crooked' lashes, even though i have very long and thick lashes. I have dirty blonde hair, green/blue/grey eyes, and light skin. i want more fun makeup, and i want to stop being so scared and obsessed. i know i'm attractive. any advice for a girl like me? what is trying to hard. do people really care about my makeup as much as i think? if someone could help me i'd really appreciate it! thanks!!!

Makeup advice please?

Take it from someone older and wiser ... everyone else is too focused on themselves to notice you. Wear some brighter colors if you want, experiment on the weekends until you get the look you want. Try a charcoal liner or a khaki green eyeliner for a more smoky, but still day time look. Watch makeup tutorials on YouTube. Practice and see what you like and be proud of who you are!

Makeup advice please?

You have the right idea, staying with natural makeup. On the night, though, you can wear heavier, or more colourful/darker makeup and have fun with it. When you're older, and you look back at pictures, or yearbooks, you'll realise just how silly those girls with bright pink and orange eyeshadow really look.

Makeup advice please?

use loose powder foundation and blush, it won't look as heavy, and maybe try to use a dark colored eyeshadow like navy brown grey purple or black instead of eyeliner and don't do a thick line, just make it look like normal eyeliner but spread out a little....

Makeup advice please?

Brown eyeliner

Brown/black mascara

Concealer or tinted moisturizer

Pretty pink blush

Any color lipgloss

White shimmery eyeshadow in inner corners and browbone

You won't be trying too hard because trust me, almost every girl in highschool wears so much makeup.

This look is natural and pretty.

Makeup advice please?

well first you need to not be afraid to try new things, meybe try a more fun eyeliner, like teal or purple. dont cake these on because it will make you look like your trying waaaay too hard. wear brown eyeliner if your going to wear eyeshadow, or no eyeliner at all, eyeshadow colors that would look best on you is light purple, light green and white. maybe wear a little lip gloss too. And no, people dont care as much about your makeup as you think they do, follow these tips and your most likely to get compliments on your makeup

Makeup advice please?

i think brown looks really nice, it probobly brings out your eyes.

you might want to also use brown eyeshadow and some black eye shadow at the end of your eyes (close to your hair)

and some white eyeliner on the edges of your eyes (front, close to yourt eyes)

something like this

http://photobucket.com/mediadetail/?medi...

dont be afraid to experiment with makeup.

you're old enough, have fun, now is the age to discover what makeup you like, what looks good on you.

also i think pink eye shadow and brown mascara would look nice,

i wouldnt use eyeliner because you have light hair, light eyes, and light skin, so any kind of eyeliner will make you look fake.

Makeup advice please?

its good to stay natural and dont over do it to be fake. try adding eyeshadow, a yellow gold tone or tan brown. and not high gloss lipgloss, maybe a lite pink-clear gloss

Makeup advice please?

You could have more fun and still look natural by trying some new shades. I'd suggest: pink eyeshadows, bronzer, and maybe some colored eyeliner. LIke Purple liner with pink eyeshadow...doesn't look hard and coordinates well.

Or have fun with some tinted lipglosses or balms.

What causes?

WHAT CAUSES HAIR TO TURN GREY/WHITE IN YOUNG WOMEN?

What causes?

genetics, I think. I started turning gray when I was a senior in high school.

What causes?

genetics, or damage by a wound. my daughter aged 35 has a place where most hair is white, its along a scar she got when a child. She has no other grey hair

What causes?

when women worry so much,

i do that (worry alot...), but i'm only 14, so what would i know?